Thursday, June 25, 2009

The Proposal-1

IT was 4.15 a:m...n the guy who would usually be snoring till 8.45 even though his class would be at 9...everyday...was wide awake...turning sides on the bed..so restless so confused..."what will she think?" "it will be so awkward...what if she never speaks to me after that?.." "naa...I can't do this.." "but how can I let her go without telling her what I feel..."god...she is an idiot...she should have known it...I mean why do girls need to be told everything... why can't they understand...somethings on their own..".."I'm not saying it...let it be..".."I have to...".."well maybe i should write down..."...he ripped the centre page of his notebook...n began writing...Dearest Riya.."dearest??whats wrong with me...how can i call her that...naa....[striked it with a pen]...Riya...[hmm that's better]..he thought to himself...listen i want to tell u that i think i like u...i don't know y...its stupid...but.."but????why??"...this sounds bad...can't write it...forget it...he crumpled that paper in his hand and started walking from one corner of his room to the other...finally ..he threw himself on the bed..n said to himself.."i don't think I'm prepared..to say anything to her right now..but if i don't i will have to wait for another month..as she will be gone fr a month to her granny's place for vaccations.." "gosh...what do i do?..." "I'm sure ma'am must be sleeping a sound sleep..n here I'm going mad coz of her....".."what do I do...?till yesterday I could have opened my mouth..and said whatever i felt like..and now its all so difficult all of a sudden.."..while he was still trying to figure out what to do..the clock struck 6..the first rays of the sun..peeped into his room..he knew he won't be able to sleep anyhow...and was feeling uneasy within those four walls of his room...with the idea of refreshing himself he decided to go out for a walk... after a stroll across the park..he sat down on a bench..
and began saying his thoughts aloud.."this is the first time I'm going so crazy over something..i was never like that...?y??maybe i know...its coz before this whenever I had a problem I had Riya by my side to set things right...she used to absorb all my tensions and return my smile...and today when its about her... have nobody to turn to for help.....I feel so lost without her..."..sighs.."why am i complicating things...everything was so simple earlier...".."should I risk my friendship with her..for my heart's sake..???"..he covered his face with both his hands...n sat motion less for a while... Just then an old lady...who was sitting exactly behind him on the other bench..came and sat next to him..putting her hand on his shoulder she said,"I'm sorry i just overheard the conversation u were having with yourself... I don't know if i should be interfering...but seeing u so troubled...n confused..i just couldn't stop myself...do u think you would like to talk?".. "I don't know"..he said in an agitated manner..."u don't know????know what?that u want to talk about it or not???or that u should tell her that u love her??"..he stared at the lady for 2 minutes..n said"how easily u said it...wish it was that easy...I don't even know if I should be doing it..at all...."..a sudden smile appeared on the lady's face..n she said"what are you scared of...a NO??..".."nooo...its not that...but what if I lose her friendship as well..it will never be the same again.."...he quickly responded...becoming more soft in her tone she said "u thought of it this way..but did u ever think that if u won't say it..you lose the chance of making her stay in your life forever..one day without her and u r miserable..do you want to remain that ways forever..i know things might get awkward..if it doesn't function the way you expect it to..but then she is Ur friend she will understand..n I know u will make it easy for her...but if u don't say it u lose the battle before fighting it...don't let that happen son..go tell her.."

[to be continued]

18 comments:

  1. wow... this is going places already! :)
    cant wait for the next part... its interesting, and very beautifully written Parzi...

    ps: could u please remove the word verification? it makes commenting from mobile a bit difficult. thank u! :)

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  2. Lovely post.. for the fact that u've detailed his thoughts so well.... I could almost be in his place going through all the thoughts....

    U r actually a good fiction writer... I never exaggerate while commenting... :)

    Now.. waiting for the story to reveal further :)

    Cheers..!!
    Arjun

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  3. pleease continue it soon.. i just had a smile on my face while reading this..!

    its so realisitic !

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  4. Nice!!! :) Waiting for the next part!!!

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  6. Hello! Dear,

    I read your post, its simply MARVELLOUS. I loved your technique of writing & would love to read your other posts.

    I would be looking forward to your responses on my blog, its:
    simran-easypeasy.blogspot.com

    Good luck for next posts………….!!!!!!!!!!!!



    Keep Smiling Always……………..

    Love,
    Manjari

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  7. Hahah this is nice.. i liked the 'Ma'am' part.. made me smile:)

    You are proving... Tha solitary writer's friend:)

    Good going.. waiting for the continuation:)

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  8. Hey Parzi. It is a very well written piece. The suggestion of that old lady is superb as well as delicate. pls continue it soon.n yes I'll be waiting for ur visit on my page.
    keep writing.
    cheers

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  9. @leo

    thank u soooooooooo much 4 ur kind words and appreciation...thanks for liking it..hope i keep up 2 ur expectaions in the next part...thanks a ton..
    n yes i did remove the wiord verification...thanks 4 letting me know i din't even knw it ws on..sorry 4 the inconvenience it caused so far..
    thanks once again...
    god bless!

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  10. @arjun...
    thank u soooooooooo much...u r always so encouarging n supportive ...i really happy u liked it...hope u like the next one as well..
    thanks a ton!

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  11. @pinkzzz
    hieee dear...i'm glad u r smiling...thanks for liking it....hope u enjoy the sequel also...
    keep smiling
    godbless!

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  12. @thoorika...
    thank youuuuuuuuuuuu soooooooooo muchhhhhhhhhhhhh...fr liking it...hope i dont disappoint u in the next on!

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  13. @manjari
    hieeeeee
    welcome to my blog...thank u soooooooooooooooooooooooooo muchhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh 4 being sooooo sweet n encouraging...it really means a lot...thank you...n yes ur blog is awesome...luved it..
    good luck to u too
    god bless!

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  14. @princess nuchu
    hahahaha...i'm glad it made u smile...hope u like the next part as well
    keep smiling
    thanks a ton!

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  15. @tickled pink...
    hieee...thank u sooooooooooooo muchhhhhhhh dear...really very kind of u to say that ...thanks a ton...
    did visit ur blog...its very nice...
    keep writing...u will find me there...
    god bless!

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  16. first of all a bigu sorryyyyyy..for being so late...all blames to my net connection :P

    n thank God it's blessin in disguise tat am here wen the sec part is out :P coz i needn't wait :P:P

    lemme chk it..

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  17. @priya....
    awwww.. dear..its perfectly alrite...but honestly whenever i c ur comment...it makes me feel elated..
    hehehehe...yes u din't hv 2 wait fr the second one...its already ...hope u liked it..and as for the third..hahahaha...sorry fr the slap...
    hanji...mai jaldi hi likhungi...wont disappoint u again...
    thanks for coming,reading and encouraging
    hugs!

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  18. that God there was a part 2 to this :)

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